Final project

https://youtu.be/YDsZhx5qJGM

in class writing

1. What was your vision as a director/creator for this project?
I wanted to be able to catch the attention of the audience from the first photo, and I wanted to be able to create something that is more modern so it was up dated and everyone would be able to understand 

2. What elements of the original story did you maintain in your project?
I didn't really keep anything the same I kept the same idea but made it different. so in the original story it was a train crash, but in my story it was a plane crash and at the end I kept it kinda the same when the wife dies but I had my wife die of shock of something in a dream and the original had her die of shock when the husband came in.

3. What did you change about the original story in your project?
I changed the fact that there was kids in the story and that the wife actually liked the husband.

4. What is the twist or climax of your adaptation?
the twist is that when the wife gets the phone call it is actually dream so she never actually got the phone call but was so in shock she had a heart attack and passed away.

5. What is the strongest part of your project so far?
I would say the strongest part of my project so far would be the wife waiting for the husband to get home, falls asleep and has a bad dream but you won't know that until she passes. 

6. What is the weakest part of your project so far?
the weakest part of my project so far is that the kids don't really do much and I want them to be more involved.

7. How has this project helped you learn about how stories work?
this project helped me learn that you really have to have some kind of twist in the story in order to make it interesting and keep the readers awake.

8. How has this project helped you learn how theater works?
that the little things matter when it comes to giving detail because you want to make sure the audience knows whats going on and doesn't feel lost 

modernized the story idea

The mother is a stay at home mom and the husband was going to be flying back that night from a business trip.

The kids were all in bed sleeping because they had school the next day and it was late. 

The mom was going to stay up and wait for her husband to come home. 

So she was sitting in the living room on the couch with the tv on waiting.

When all of sudden she got a phone call that her husband’s plane had crashed and he didn’t make it.

She woke up from her dream in such shock and from such fright that she lost her husband she had a heart attack. she was so scared that the man who paid for everything had passed away

The husband got home and found her on the couch and by the time he got home and found her she didn’t make it. 

It turned out he missed his flight so he had to get the next plane.



the genre of the story is sad

the characters are

A mom whos name is kylie

A dad whos name is asher  

2 daughter 

And 2 sons 

One one son is 16 and his name is Andre

The other son who is 18 and his name is Xavier

The one daughter who is 12 and her name is jasmine  

And the other  daughter who is 14 and her name is lola  
the setting is at home and the time period is now

modernize this story

I think to modernize the story we need to update the emotions of the story and make things more clear. maybe slow the ending down just a little bit

more reading

Christopher loves talking about his A level math class and the scene seems to start off with him talking about how he took the test for the class but is not just waiting for the results. I sense some tension between his father and him because he is waiting with his mother and father but seems to be very mad at his father because he won't talk to him. the father tries to but Christophers love back by buying him a dog, because he seems mad at himself for being mean to Christopher. at the end of the scene we find out that Christopher got an A on his math test.

reading

18-20
- I noticed that it seems that mrs Alexander has some kind of hearing problem
- and it seems like Christopher is a different person when he is around mrs Alexander it seems like he is more open and not afraid to talk about things
4-6
- we figured out that Christopher has autism
- there is a police officer in the sense that doesn't know about Christopher and yells at him not knowing he has a problem
12-15
-we found out Christophers mother passed away
-the dad didn't seem to care about the death
85-87
- Christophers mother Judy isn't actually dead and she seems to push Christopher
-  it seems like Christopher can't hold his feelings in anymore

Group project with Mia and Conner

https://youtu.be/BEnaLd6SnY4

response

I am the darker brother.
They send me to eat in the kitchen

When company comes,- when this happens Mia or I will kick Conner out  and send him to the kitchen and laugh 

But I laugh,
And eat well,
And grow strong.

Tomorrow I’m going to eat with them- Conner 

Mia or i will open the door let the company in and Conner will go sit at the table and wait for us to come sit down and we wont say anything to him and let him stay 

Conner and Mia 

The reason why we are doing this is because it’s showing that someone is sticking up for themselves and that he doesn’t care what anyone has to say because he wont listen to it and if someone does say something its going in one ear and out the other 

poem response

Lauren Davis

Poem response

10/24/19

My first impression on the poem “I, Too” by Langston Hughes was that this was going to be a story about this this black women or man and how they suffered. It came off as someone was going to be more a slave then someone who stood up for them selfs.  And i thought it was going to be sad and heartbreaking the whole time and disturbing in a way. The more i read the poem over and over the more i realized how strong this person was and how much self convince this person had in them selfs. The person came off with a very strong attitude and was very straight foward. He or she wanted to be able to show that they were worth more then what the people were looking at and, and they shouldn’t be douting someone for there skin tone. What I liked about the poem was how he or she was able to have so much convinced to be able to make them selfs happy by doing something that was kinda a bold move. They wanted to show the person they were living with that they had more to show and more to bring to the table then what they were looking.  The reason why i thought this was such a moving part was because its kinding giving a massage to people who have low self esteem that you can do anything as long as it makes you happy and to not be afraid to push for something. 

4 things i want to ask the poet would be.

1. How did you think of starting something off in a sad way and turning it around to make it happy?
2. How did you give so a good massage in such a short amount of time?
3. How long did it take you to come up with this poem? 
4. What was you feeling when you realized how popular your poem came?

poem notes

The poem "I Too" by Langston Hughes:
- there are 5 stanzas
-I don't really feel as though there is any rhyme scheme but I do feel the flow of the everything is pretty fluent
- figurative language
- the meaning of this poem to me is that the poet grew up with not so nice peers and seemed as he/her peers were embarrassed of he/she and would rather have them hide in the other room to eat then eating with them. but the poet makes it seem like he/she will be coming over he/shes fear and going to eat with them at the main table

The poem "Mother to Son" by Langston Hughes 

- there are 20 lines 

- no rhyme scheme, and no stanzas 

- the major theme would be working out and having self convince 

- the poem is about the thoughts of a mother who is going through a rough patch. she knows to fight everything she's going through and to be strong. she looks passed her miserable life and encourages her son to look up to her and to push pass all the bad and live his life happy.

The poem "The Red Wheelbarrow" by William Carlos Williams 

- this tone of this poem is very dry, it  was kinda boring and not a lot was talked about besides a red wheelbarrow and chickens needing that wheelbarrow. but it talked about rain which is just sad in general so the poem is self was sad and boring. 

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figurative language

simile- my twins and i go together like peanut butter and jelly
metaphor-  my boot is the only thing that doesn't match my twins
personification-my twins eyes shout out happiness
hyperbole- my twin is as tall as JJW
onomatopoeia- the twins Popped open the soda
alliteration- my twisted twins turned traveling down
assonance-the twins took time to turn around

final draft

Is heaven really better

   “Heaven” by Kane Brown is a big eye opener. It shows happiness, carrying and the love that someone could have for someone. The reason why i like this poem so much is because it shows how much he actually cares about his partner because he is expressing his love for his partner to the world, and to me thats’s true love. As much as this poem may make me feel lonely in ways it makes me happy because it shows there are good guys out there. 

A few times it says “i don’t know how heaven, heaven could be better then this”, i love this line because to me it is saying he’s ready to spend the rest of his life with her until he goes to heaven. The way he expresses his feeling to the whole word to show his partner he wants nothing else but her shows me how much he cares for this person which gives me hopes one day. When he says “im right where i wanna be” it is telling me he is all settled in on where he is in his life right now and makes me feel lonely because for a guy to put this much effort out makes me want to have high hopes and find someone like him one day. 

   The one line that always makes me sad and really gets to me is when he says “everybody’s talking about heaven like they just can’t wait to go” to me that makes me sad because he wants to live as long as he can to be with his love. He is showing he is ready for commitment and is telling her she is the one. The way he turns his love into a poem to show how much he cares for one person makes it hard to believe that there are guys out there that actually do this because it gives other people high expectations. 

  This poem makes me just feel relaxed and laid back because of the way he puts his love into words. The more you actually read the words and pay attention to what they are saying the more you understand the connection. Not every guy is going to be like Kane brown but the way he shows his love for his wife and isn’t afraid to put it out to the world shows how much he truly cares for her.

  According to Kane, heaven isn’t better, him spending his time with his wife and creating this kind of love poem to share with this world is what he finds better and couldn’t be happier with what he’s doing with life. He wasn’t putting this out to the world to get famous he was putting it out to the world to just show his love and so many people fell in love with this message he become famous off of it. So buy him sharing an honest message it changed his life around.

  

first draft

“Heaven” by Kane Brown is a big eye opener. It shows happiness, carrying and the love that someone could have for someone. The reason why i like this poem so much is because it shows how much he actually cares about his partner because he is expressing his love for his partner to the world, and to me thats’s true love. As much as this poem may make me feel lonely in ways it makes me happy because it shows there are good guys out there. 

A few times it says “i don’t know how heaven, heaven could be better then this”, i love this line because to me it is saying he’s ready to spend the rest of his life with her until he goes to heaven. The way he expresses his feeling to the whole word to show his partner he wants nothing else but her shows me how much he cares for this person which gives me hopes one day. When he says “im right where i wanna be” it is telling me he is all settled in on where he is in his life right now and makes me feel lonely because for a guy to put this much effort out makes me want to have high hopes and find someone like him one day. And the one line that always makes me sad and really gets to me is when he says “everybody’s talking about heaven like they just cant wait to go” to me that makes me sad because he wants to live as long as he can to be with his love.

three arguments

when it says "everyone talking heaven like they just can't wait to go" you can argue on why you wouldn't want to go

"I could stay here forever"- you can argue why you wouldn't want to stay there forever

"I swear this is perfect"- you can argue on why it isn't perfect


Thesis: the poem is trying to show how special this someone is to this writing.
"this is perfect come kiss me one more time"
"lying next to you, in this bed with you"
"I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven could be better then this"

first draft link

https://youtu.be/07LRN54oKWI 

song edit

Kane brown- heaven 

This is perfect

Come kiss me one more time

I COULDN,T DREAM THIS UP

Even if i tried

You and me in this moment

FEELS LIKE MAGIC only

I'm right where I wanna be

Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go

Saying how it's gonna be so good, so beautiful

Lying next to you, in this bed with you, I ain't convinced

Cause, I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven

Could be better than this

I swear you're and angel

Sent to this world

What did I do right to deserve you, girl?

I could stay here forver

I'd be fine if we never had to even leave this room

Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go

Saying how it's gonna be so good, so beautiful

Lying next to you, in this bed with you, I ain't convinced

Cause, I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven

Could be better than this

Could be better than this

Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go

Saying how it's gonna be so good, so beautiful

Lying next to you, in this bed with you, I ain't convinced

Cause, I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven

Could be better than this (Heaven)

Could be better than this (Heaven, heaven)

I swear this is perfect

Come kiss me one more time

5) the overall tone of this poem is happy and i think this because he is sending a message to the love of his life.

6) this song  makes me feel laid back 

9) I like this poem because he is saying this to his fiance who is about to become his wife,and i feel like it brings joy to the couple and shows how much he cares about her and wants to spend the rest of his life with her. And that was really makes me like this poem because it has meaning to it. 

10) My 3 favorite and most important lines are:

1. I'm right where I wanna be
2. Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go
3.  Heaven Could be better than this

song

kane brown- heaven 

This is perfect
Come kiss me one more time
I couldn't dream this up
Even if i tried
You and me in this moment
Feels like magic only
I'm right where I wanna be

Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go
Saying how it's gonna be so good, so beautiful
Lying next to you, in this bed with you, I ain't convinced
Cause, I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven
Could be better than this

I swear you're and angel
Sent to this world
What did I do right to deserve you, girl?
I could stay here forver
I'd be fine if we never had to even leave this room

Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go
Saying how it's gonna be so good, so beautiful
Lying next to you, in this bed with you, I ain't convinced
Cause, I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven
Could be better than this
Could be better than this

Everybody's talking about heaven like they just can't wait to go
Saying how it's gonna be so good, so beautiful
Lying next to you, in this bed with you, I ain't convinced
Cause, I don't know how, I don't know how heaven, heaven
Could be better than this (Heaven)
Could be better than this (Heaven, heaven)

I swear this is perfect
Come kiss me one more time

Group performance

https://youtu.be/A7dytbicd1s

What I found hard about working as a group was that me personally felt that I had more pressure on me to remember mine lines and was more scared to mess up because if I messed up I would mess the whole group up.
 What was easy for me was actually performing in front of the class now I felt more comfortable being in front of the class more than I did last time.
What made the performances interesting was that there were more people to pay attention to and got different emotions from everyone so it was more fun.
What worked was as a class was everyone was more supportive this time so everyone was less scared to work together.

poem songs

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kZye3qiN_SQ
drift away uncle cracker

in class writing

in the poem I liked the line "enter the world refreshed by the hope" and I like this line because I feel like it makes me feel like I should be a little more laid back by things and not worried about so many things, I feel like it means to open and not be so afraid of things.
And I feel like I connect with the line "love you work, and enjoy your play" because i take picking out my outfits very serious because I want to love what I wear and love what I put together.  and  I enjoy playing lacrosse so I feel like I connect with line pretty well.

poetry unit

1. for poem one I thought it was interesting how she had so many examples of how to be prepared in life. and for the second poem I find it interesting that he compares a waterski to a poem. for the first poem the line "love your work and enjoy your play" capture my attentions and for the second poem the line "I say drop a mouse into a poem" captures my attentions. the emotion of the first poem is carrying and loving. and the second poem is more straight up and wants to give the people an idea of poetry

Small town

https://youtu.be/MhY0LK1kxuw
I think I used good emotions
I need to work on not smiling when I don’t need to be
Other people were good at keeping a straight face when needed
We as a class need to work on helping each other feel confident

my broken lacrosse sticks feelings

I was designed by an 8th grade girl. She was very picky and wanted everything to be perfect. After 3 hours of being tested with different things she decided she wanted me. she picked me up after two weeks of being built. I had a black body with gold lettering, and a black head with white gold and black strings. I was very light and thin. She brought me every where and played with me every day. when she was shooting around with me I would feel whip flashed and dizzy because it was one shot after another. when she would thrown a ball against a wall I was getting hit in the head over and over again. All of a sudden i stared getting hit and wacked and was in pain. But the girl didn’t seem to care. One day she was playing with me and was shaking like she had never been before. I assumed it was a big important game so i knew i had to do my best and help her. After about 20 minutes of playing with me all of a sudden i was cut in half. I felt the pain from the little girl and tear drops on my body. I didn’t know what had happened but I was thrown aside and was laying on a dusty ground till the game was over. the girl picked me up and brought me home, but the girl never played with me again. she shipped me off to someone new and I was just thrown away

bye bye lax stick

For my birthday one year all I wanted to do was design my own lacrosse stick. My parents brought me to a place and I spent three hours designing it. I wanted to make sure I liked the texture, the weight, the head shape, the style of the strings, I wanted everything to be perfect. after the three hours I decided what I wanted. It took about 2 weeks for them to get it ready for me and three games into using it it snapped in half. so after all the time and effort I put into making it I felt broke.

because I love lacrosse and it sometimes you get broke.

fire

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